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...Words to cast/My feelings into sculpted thoughts/To make some wisdom last
Musical: New Take on "Wish I May" 
26th-Mar-2006 05:38 am
Studio
Up all night working on this thing and now it's time for bed. I've noticed that in the last few days, both weaklingrecords and simeonjawn have posted new recordings. This must be some kind of spring fever. Last week over break I started trying to get the creative juices flowing by rebuilding the studio and starting on a long-needed re-recording, perhaps in hopes of finding new songs too. (I also made sure to apologize/ask permission in advance to the girl next door with whom I share that particular wall--she was way cool about it.) I still haven't written anything new in a long time, but I'm glad to have gotten a lot of work done on "Wish I May." I posted an earlier version of this a few years ago, but I have since re-written the chorus and recorded and mixed new parts of the accompaniment. I still don't think I have the vocal strength to handle this one myself, and would much love to hear Lang or weaklingrecords do the thing instead. (So cut and email me a vocal lead track, Doug, if you feel frisky.) The goal with this one, as I wrote before, was to write a non-gender-specific pop love song that could be recorded/sung by anyone without distraction or modification.

Here's the current version's mp3: I think I'll sit with this one for a while and see if it needs more to be a satisfactory demo. At the very least there's still a few tiny timing gaffs that could either fade away to my ear or come to drive me insane....

Wish I May

Pick a star this night
and hold me in your arms so tight
and say you might
make a wish upon that distant light
Oh say "I wish I may, wish I might"

Lying on the car’s hood
as worlds circle overhead
I remember why we need to run away
why we flee the city streets
We pull the blankets closer
lift our eyes above the hills

Pick a star this night
and hold me in your arms so tight
and say you might
make a wish upon that distant light
Oh say "I wish I may, wish I might"

What we can’t have
always taunts us
Love time eternity
mem’ries haunt us
Days slip away, but not now:
Not when we want us.

Pick a star this night
and hold me in your arms so tight
and say you might
make a wish upon that distant light
Oh say "I wish I may, wish I might"

Music comes at unawares
Your hands a melody on my face
Star light, star bright
dancing on the lines you trace
The two of us sharing
silent songs in our embrace

Pick a star this night
and hold me in your arms so tight
and say you might
make a wish upon that distant light
Oh say "I wish I may, wish I might"

Let the stars fall on us now
Let the world burn in the night
Let time run to never end
Let the stars fall on us now
Let the world burn in the night
Let time run to never end
You here with me
In your arms
Never end
Comments 
26th-Mar-2006 11:51 pm (UTC)
I like the song!
27th-Mar-2006 10:38 pm (UTC)
Thanks! Obviously, I do, too, or I wouldn't have posted it, but I'm still thinking about levels and such, and re-doing my vocal track. But it's getting there....
1st-Apr-2006 04:58 pm (UTC)
It's very good - I've finally got around to listening to it! The only thing I'd say is that perhaps you need to take deeper breaths when singing it (you're singing, yes?). It just sounds like some of the phrases are cut a bit short. But I'm no singer. Anyway, I like it.
1st-Apr-2006 05:43 pm (UTC)
Huh. I'm not sure that I know quite what you mean, but I'll give it a listen and see if I can figure it out. But I am sure that all sorts of things are wrong: I've not sung under direction in far too long, and I know that I've got an awful habit of singing too quietly, which comes of being in apartments for yeara and being perhaps too conscious of my neighbours.

Of course, I could use a bassline if you sent one my way: I've found that even though I'm used to making up basslines from singing four-part doo-wop songs, writing guitar basslines for these demos has been really difficult for me. The guy who plays base for me, alas, is the world's worst correspondent, so I'm sure I could never coax one out of him until we were actually trying to record this in the studio. So feel free to contribute any ideas! :-)
1st-Apr-2006 09:23 pm (UTC)
Well, I suck rather at making up bass lines, because I've learned classicaly, and therefore prefer to read music. However, if you send me the chords I can probably make something suitable up - it's improvising on the spot I have problems with.
1st-Apr-2006 11:36 pm (UTC)
Aw, thanks, Jen! I was speaking light-heartedly, so please don't think you're under any obligation: it's not something I'm really worried about. On the flipside, should you just happen to want to do something like that, that's really fun!

It is in fact an absurdly simple little structure, with the verses and choruses and outro being a repeated
G D Em C
and ending with a sort of rallying
G D G
for the verses and choruses,
and the bridge is
C Em Am D

And that's it. Oh, whoops! Those are the fingerings: I'm playing it at capo 4, so that's really what? (Here's my lack of training shining through...)
B F# G#m E
B F# B
E Am C#m F#

Is that right? See? Already more trouble than it's worth!
:-)
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